The peer reviews helped me to feel like I am a part of a community. here is some satisfaction in knowing that I can have input into improving a piece of work, and that others may do likewise for me. I would like to believe that reviewers share this sense of collegiality. Peer reviewing the work of others has helped me to think more critically about my own work and it has helped me understand about my own mistakes. Here are some peer reviews from my classmates.

Literacy Narrative Peer Review :

Kayla Duncan
Peer: Zawad
FIQWS Composition

I really enjoyed reading your literacy narrative. It was very interesting to read because it showed how you wrestled with becoming comfortable with your English since it is not your first language. I also liked how you spoke about how you felt more comfortable speaking your native tongue rather than English because you felt that you were unable to communicate with your classmates. Also I find it really amazing that you have only been in America for 3 years and you have grown a lot with your English because it is not always easy to learn a new language. I felt like the beginning of the narrative was very captivating and made me want to read more about your experiences. It was nice to see you talk about your experiences with English back when you were still living in Bangladesh and how that relationship with English completely changed when you came to America. One quick fix is having a title that is an attention grabber. Some things that I would push on are explaining more about your transition from speaking Bengali to speaking English. I was really interested in the fact that you speak both languages, how does that affect your speaking in school, with your friends and at home. I think you should give more details on your internal struggle when you felt that you couldn’t communicate with your classmates. The sequence of events was a little unclear to me when you started talking about the Dracula book. I feel like you should still speak about it because it had an impact on your reading and writing but when I got to that paragraph it felt like a whole new narrative. I really liked how you ended off the narrative to show how English has become a huge part of your life now and has become an outlet that you use daily. I never thought of a language being able to impact someone’s life and their literacy and it was really interesting to see you talk about it and close off the narrative in that way. Overall I felt that your literacy narrative was very strong and it was very interesting to read.

Research Critical Analysis Peer Review :

Towiba Begum
Professor Bellamy
FIQWS 10105
November 6, 2020
The beginning of the essay is quite interesting as the question asked in the first paragraph indicates the idea you planned to talk about in the text. As an audience, after reading the first paragraph, I was inquisitive to find how you support the thesis. The thesis statement is clearly stating that Disney princesses should not be role models for young generations as their character portrayal can negatively affect children’s minds rather than encouraging them for something good. You included enough evidence to strengthen and support your claim while explaining the sources. It is amazing to read the way you made a connection with the pieces of evidence and the thesis to establish your point on the depiction of fairytales princesses. The text was pretty organized, which made it quite easy to read. The ending is well sorted while restating the thesis indirectly, which is essential for readers to recall the main topic of the essay. The last sentence of the essay, “Now, you might think about that the next time before watching one of these movies” will raise questions among readers whether they want their kids to get influenced negatively.
The essay is good, but I think there are some points you can improve on to make it better. If you include a title to give a hint to the readers about the topic of the essay, it would be great. In the fourth paragraph, the first two quotes were not needed, and cutting that will help to express your point more precisely. You used some phrases like “also supports my claim” “to support the logic of my claim” that might sound monotonous. So try to point out your claim by paraphrasing it instead of using these phrases. Also, you can avoid using “In one of the other secondary  outside sources” such phrases. You included some long quotes in the fifth and sixth paragraphs that can be confusing while reading the text. You might prefer to use MLA formatting for this type of evidence to make it more organized. These are some suggestions that might be helpful to develop your essay, otherwise, the writing is informative and worthy to grab readers’ attention. I really enjoyed reading your essay.